Magpie Tales Photo Prompt #111
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| Image: ParkeHarrison |
The thought of her words
rang in his ears
as he hid in shame;
The broom lay quietly
in the corner,
the mud stubbornly clinging
to the pristine floor.
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"hid in his shame" yues, he is taking that posture. good call
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Thank you! Nothing like Mom's words to cut...
DeleteOh, it sounds as if he should be in the dog house let alone the nest LOL
ReplyDeleteMade me smile, thank you :)
You got it!
DeleteI've read other takes on this picture, most of them having to do with a nurturing quality inspired by the nest, but your take is unique. Now that I've read your poem I can see the shame element as well.
ReplyDeleteYea..if that's not a hang dog posture, I don't know what it is...
Deletewell mom you should know...you were there, right? ok that one might get me another whack...
ReplyDeleteYea, I may have said it a couple of times to my kids, but I heard it all the time from my Mom. And come to think about it, she used to say it to my Dad when he tracked in mud from the farm...only he would just smile at her.
ReplyDeleteHa, nice take!
ReplyDeleteNo wonder he's hanging his head! Thank goodness she didn't take the broom to him!
ReplyDeleteThis is wonderfully succinct but powerful too. Very interesting take on the prompt. K.
ReplyDeleteAnd so he should hang his head in shame!
ReplyDeleteAnna :o]
Tracking mud all over a newly cleaned floor is so thoughtless. Such thoughtlessness needs to be put right by a clean up on the part of the offender. Otherwise, the wall of shame is called for. I enjoyed this poem and I have to say, the person in the prompt looks very guilt ridden. Thanks for sharing, Laurel.
ReplyDeleteI do believe those words have left my lips one time too many in this house.
ReplyDeleteLOL!...me too! My Mom said it all the time!
DeleteSnicker...perfect...he does look like he's been reprimanded...
ReplyDeleteThanks Tess... talk about a hangdog look...
Deletegreat take on the prompt...brilliant ..x
ReplyDeleteOh, very clever. He does seem sad.
ReplyDeletea time out for the little boy.....hiding his face in shame...
ReplyDeleteOh my! Memories ... my grandfather actually used to say that!!!!!
ReplyDeleteI like this.....nicely done and thanks for sharing your wowrds
ReplyDeletePoor, neglected broom. Nice one!
ReplyDeleteSadly, I have stationary brooms in the care of chaps, too, Laurel! Loved this - neat and to the point!
ReplyDeleteI think he's wallowing in feeling sorry for himself! Needs a good whack from that broom to get him going. LOL
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